关于SAT作文批改实例讲解

Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and assignment below:

关于SAT作文批改实例讲解

When people form opinions about someone or something, what affects them most is not substance but style. In other words, the way something appears or is presented is more important than what it actually is. This principle affects how people look at their leaders and their lives, the books they read, the products they buy, and even the subjects they take at school.

Assignment: Is style more important than substance? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

习作修改

学生习作(第一段)

语言修改

Style, of course, is less important than substance. If there is a rotten apple placed in a crystal bowl in front of you, will you eat it happily only for the better style?

Style, of course, is less important than substance. If a rotten apple is placed in a crystal bowl will you happily eat it?

本段评点

本文的开头比较有特色,第一句话开门见山直接给出自己的观点,而且观点明确。第二句话用了一个比喻加反问,而且这个比喻十分恰当地说明了形式与内容的`关系,很是引人入胜,吸引阅卷人的注意力。